perfectworry: black skies have changed into blue but some nights I still dream of you (but I've seen oceans)
李杏 | Frances J., a lion-hearted girl ([personal profile] perfectworry) wrote in [personal profile] love_poetess 2013-01-19 07:53 am (UTC)

Holy conflicting feelings, Batman!

I really like your writing in this piece. You do a really good job of capturing the small town, boring life troubles of teenagerhood. I remember a lot of the things she remembers: nowhere to go on Friday nights, and the restructuring of my school district, and the cat hair. I remember anime being my escape, too. Your story here is very short, but it's conjured up a lot of memories and feelings from me.

I'm a little unsure how I feel about the ending, though. It feels like a "downer ending," even though in my experience, it was more of a begining. I'm trying to reconcile my life with the narrative, but without any more detail, I'm just left with a lot of conflict - and I like it. I think there's a tendency, especially in memoirs, to tell too much, but you've left just enough here to chew on and want more.

(Hi, this is [livejournal.com profile] meepalicious from [livejournal.com profile] writerverse.)

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